Spring Advertising Flyers Feedback (already)

Thanks rstorer, i fixed it on my version!





Oh and Lynn, i took your suggestion and cleaned up the dual glass thing, but in my version, not the one you see above Thanks
 
tpgsr said:
I never use a $ ammount because the prices of my services vary greatly. Say one customer wants a full detail at $200, and another wants a wash for $30, if i hasve a $15 off cupon, then i get hit on the second of the two. There are percentages all the time in both advertising and daily life. No prices are even mentioned, so when someone calls, i will just tell them the discount price, and they dont have to worry about any math
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If you are going to discount all your services 15%, I would say to move that statement out of the box and say it applies to all services. Mention this flyer for 15% off all of our services



At the moment it reads as though it applies just to 'The Full Spring Treatment'.
 
tnoy66 said:
If you are going to discount all your services 15%, I would say to move that statement out of the box and say it applies to all services. Mention this flyer for 15% off all of our services



At the moment it reads as though it applies just to 'The Full Spring Treatment'.
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:up good point, I would've missed that.
 
tnoy66 said:
If you are going to discount all your services 15%, I would say to move that statement out of the box and say it applies to all services. Mention this flyer for 15% off all of our services



At the moment it reads as though it applies just to 'The Full Spring Treatment'.
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no no, it does just apply to the "Spring Treatment" on this flyer, but i have several flyers that go several places, and some of them have different deals on them, i was just making a general reference to not giving $ off. Even with this flyer, a car will cost base $150-15% = $22.5 off ( I will round to $23), and an oversize SUV will be base $200 - 15% = $30 off I think i did the math right,



Anyhow, since for this particular flyer is it still ok to leave where it is in the box if it is pertaining to the box, cause it is really getting hard to move things around and still make them fit... i know :sosad



You guys are doing great with helping me though Thanks so much, This flyer better have a good success rate!!
 
Nice. ;)



"Call or click on-line to set-up an appointment, or for a quick quote"



Just a syntax issue:



Revised: "Call or go on-line for a quick quote and to set-up and appointment."



It just seems like somebody would want a round about figure before they make an appointment. I'm nit-picky.



"We will even come out to inspect the vehicle and give a more accurate no obligation price quote"



Revised:"We will even come to you to inspect the vehicle and give you a more accurate, no obligation price quote."



That didn't change much. Other than a coma.



Under the red text (Why Choose Diamond Detailing) the first w's are non capitalized and the last one is. It looks a little unfinished after the first two, maybe an exclamation point after each?



Maybe

Fully mobile automotive cleaning and detailing.

Capitalized the "F" and added a period.



I spent the time since you left to think of somethings and go over this. Just suggestions. :cool:
 
Changes Dully noted Corey, they are revised on my copy, but not the one above, Any other suggestions before i start the printing process????
 
Corey Bit Spank said:
Nice. ;)



Revised: "Call or go on-line for a quick quote and to set-up and appointment."



The"and" should be a "an"...



I hope you caught it before you printed too many
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it should be an "an" are you sure, i believe it should be and



and: Together with or along with; in addition to; as well as. Used to connect words, phrases, or clauses that have the same grammatical function in a construction



an: The form of a used before words beginning with a vowel or with an unpronounced h: an elephant; an hour
 
oh lol oops we were looking at 2 words, that and that he pointed iut was so obscure i was reading it as an anyhow. Good call guys :)
 
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