Changed my services page, check it out and give suggestions!

[mikeyg402]

I`m still working on my website which is:
MKG Auto Detail - Auto Detail Experts

I advertise for free on craigslist and heres a link to that:
Premier, Specialized Automotive Detailing

Im having my web designer change my services page to what my CL ad says. As for in the CL post, read through it and see if it makes sense to you guys, if it doesnt then obviously it wont make sense to non-detailing people!

thanks!

[Nth Degree]

Personally I think it`s way too much info and the average person will stop reading after 10 seconds. The goal should be to get them to call for an appointment. That is your opportunity to sell. Your actual site can have more info but make sure the most important info is in the first 3 lines of each section for those who will skim it. Those who are interested will continue to read but once someone who is skimming realizes they aren`t getting anything they will stop.

Most people don`t care about the technology. They just want a clean, shiny car.

[Addicted2Bling]

^^I agree, sometimes when you try to be too honest with a customer it just backfires on you. Other than that, I am jealous I cannot charge the kind of prices you are charging!

[mrclean81]

Im more surprised to see so many high end detailers messing with Craigslist in your area. Most areas that Ive looked at, including mine, are nothing but hacks, high school kids, and guys looking for summer work. My first impressions after looking at your site and your work was "what the hell is this guy doing on Craigslist?". I kinda understand why now.

[CH.Detailing]

I found it to be very informational, but also monotonous.

I would suggest maybe adding a few images or graphics, indenting the bullet points, and playing with font sizes, types, and styles. This should help to visually `break up` and organize the specific information you wish you convey and keep it interesting for your reader! You can also use this to bring the vital information the previously mentioned `skim readers` will be looking for. I would suggest to highlight the package services and prices, as less people are interested in the process as they are the bottom line pricing.

[rustytruck]

It doesn`t take much to confuse or overwhelm people. The average person looking at a Craigslist ad won`t know as much about detailing as you do, it might be better to only offer 2 different services(lower end stuff) and let them pick this or that. Usually a person shopping for a high end detail won`t be on Craigslist.

[Flannigan]

I would say there is too much repetition in steps. Instead of listing all the same steps for each detail, list the steps that are the same once, and then write "Gold Detail - Everything from the Silver detail plus step, step, step."

Also why are their spaces in your email address? That seems like it might push people away too. I think most people want to do as little work as possible to contact you. just my .02

[Gurge]

Way too much info. gotta keep it simple.

check out my services page. pretty short and sweet. I feel the more you add to the descriptions, the more overwhelming and confusing it seems

you may also want to put your lower priced packages at the top and work down to the more expensive stuff. Personal preference I guess. But once someone scrolls down and sees $300+ they might be out immediately thinking you`re out of their league.