advice on flyer

**derek37** · 06-07-2004, 10:19 AM

Please give me your thoughts on this flyer. I want to send some out ASAP so anything you guys think let me know.

Thanks

**GearHead_1** · 06-07-2004, 10:50 AM

Where are you going to post them?

**ZaneO** · 06-07-2004, 11:07 AM

It`s nice, but it`s awfully busy.

**usracer900** · 06-07-2004, 11:11 AM

Looks great, however I wouldn`t used the words "Basic" and "Very Basic" to label your services. Cheapens your service. How about using enhancing/positive words like" Super Wash" for the entry level wash and "Premium Wash" for the next up? You can use many variations but always try and positively advertise your products/services.

**derek37** · 06-07-2004, 11:17 AM

ok cool. I thought it might be a little busy myself. Usracer, "superwash and premium wash" those are good.

GearHead, probably gonna post at business parks, Doctors offices, CPA`s, etc.

Anyone else got any thoughts?

**GearHead_1** · 06-07-2004, 11:20 AM

Originally posted by usracer900

Looks great, however I wouldn`t used the words "Basic" and "Very Basic" to label your services. Cheapens your service. How about using enhancing/positive words like" Super Wash" for the entry level wash and "Premium Wash" for the next up? You can use many variations but always try and positively advertise your products/services.

The word essential would also work here.

**autogym** · 06-07-2004, 07:05 PM

I think that if you marketing it right you might found yourself overwhelmed with work and at the price you will be hurting yourself.

**zzyyzx** · 06-07-2004, 09:40 PM

I agree with the stuff above, especially about being too cheap. Maybe put a tag line on there about "mention this flyer for the above prices". Makes is seem like an extra special deal only available to certain people. That way you also know where your customers are seeing your stuff most.

**TN9thSi** · 06-07-2004, 10:38 PM

Yea, prices seem a bit low. Some customers with prior "do it for me" detailing experience may relate the pricing with low-quality, mediocre work and just look right over your services. Also the name of your business `On the Spot` is way too crammed together and very hard to read. Overall a nice start; Just needs some tweaking.

**derek37** · 06-11-2004, 12:27 AM

Ok guys here`s the latest version. Please let me know what you think of this.

**derek37** · 06-11-2004, 12:28 AM

still too wordy??

**imported_SouthernZ71** · 06-11-2004, 01:23 AM

IMO too much content... Make your discount/phone number stick out more...maybe smack the phone OR discount right in the middle, shrink the other stuff and stick it at the bottom... all that said it`s a great concept..

BTW where did you get your clip art and do you know of any places that are free?

**scottabir** · 06-11-2004, 01:30 AM

I hate it

Now I have competition in Grand Rapids

J/K I think it is looking good.

**boywonder** · 06-11-2004, 02:09 AM

a) I`d remove the Dirty Car line just to give yourself more space to play with

b) Move the "Simplify Your Life, We Come to You" phrase to the first bullet point and tie it in with that sentence.

c) Rephrase the sentence in the second bullet point. You have a repetitive phrase in there

d) The "Good Enough is not our goal" bullet could be tied in with the bullet about how you use professional products

**derek37** · 06-11-2004, 09:53 PM

Originally posted by SouthernZ71

IMO too much content... Make your discount/phone number stick out more...maybe smack the phone OR discount right in the middle, shrink the other stuff and stick it at the bottom... all that said it`s a great concept..

BTW where did you get your clip art and do you know of any places that are free?

A friend emailed me that clipart. I have no idea where she got it. Sorry.

Thanks everyone, those were some great replies. Pretty funny too. Since flyers only return about 1-3% and because I`m getting pretty tired of messing around with them I`m going to go with this one. Thanks again everyone :xyxthumbs