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    "poster" first draft




    this is a draft any input is appreciated like wording ,pricing,picture change
    etc etc,,,,,, thank you!

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    The correct spelling is door Jambs, not Jams.
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    Re: "poster" first draft

    I would remove the electric blower, your clients won`t care how you dry their vehicles. Just my 2 cents.

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    Misspelled "trunk" on total recondition package.

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    "contaminants" I think is what you want on total recondition? You have contaminates.

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    for the full detail, you could maybe move the part about "for fairly clean cars" to the top to define the full detail.

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    Maybe use a pic of a car in full snow foam as one of your four pictures (I`m sure a lot of people won`t know what that means...they might get it if they see a car in the pics covered in foam).

    Go get `em!

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    In maintenance wash,

    you use the phrases "detailed hand wash" and "detailed safe wash". Maybe words like meticulous helps.

    The purpose of the air dry really is probably a touchless dry process so I would emphasize that rather than air dry.

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    My opinion only.....

    THe Full recondition should be by quote instead of pricing it. $450.00 may turn people off till you can talk to them and let them know whats involved etc.
    Formerly the "Best Detailer", now just Super Wax Waster Man. Not necessarily tactful, but normally right. It`s good to be da King !!!

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    To make things less confusing to the customer I would put under `Full Detail`, "Includes everything in the Maintenance Detail Plus this, this and this" and then put your Clay bar and sealant. Same for the `Total Reconditioning Package`, put `Includes everything in the Full Detail Package Plus;` this way they know exactly what they are getting and why they are paying more.
    Get your shine on!

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    thanks guys i really appreciate the comments/suggestions all great ideas

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    You guys are awesome!

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    I`m waiting on the second design will post as soon as i get the rough draft

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    Re: "poster" first draft

    I don`t see windows mentioned anywhere. You know you do them but a potential customer won`t unless you tell them.......interior & exterior.

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    Re: "poster" first draft



    here`s the second draft to me all they have to change is instead of total reconditioning i told them to put extra/add on services and on the bottom where it states icar certified i told them to put i-car trained/certified and also licensed and fully insured ! other than what i want to change do you guys have any ideas or is this pretty much a go to print after the changes i mentioned

 

 

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