| Re: posted this on another board. tell me what you think of my detailing writeup. manawar,
Very good write up. Excellent detail! (Pun intended.)
One issue though - The content is EXCELLENT, but it's a bit difficult to read because of very long paragraphs with multiple topics. For example, your first paragraph seems to have two topics. The first topic relates to the problem you see with how people detail cars. The second relates to what you are doing about it. Another example is the "Step 1" paragraph - it has about eight topics.
Please consider breaking the text into more paragraphs. For example, break up your first paragraph into two paragraphs starting with the text,
"So I decided to make a thread...". And, in the "Step 1" paragraph, break each topic (e.g. "Towels: ") out as a separate paragraph.
IMO, making these minor formatting changes will take a very good write up and make it an EXCELLENT write up.
Regards,
Dan. |